"Ashley do you have the keys?" "
" Yes i do I'm going in the car with Maggie"
"Okay i will meet you out in the car in a few seconds."
Once we were all in the car we were headed off to have a fantastic day at the park. When we arrived at the park it was very quite but the field was all muddy because it rained the night before.
Ashley said " I am going to rinse my feet off in the water I will be right back"
While Ashley was over near the water, Paul and Maggie noticed she was gone for quite a while. Maggie was worrying about her so she ran over and said "mom are you okay?" She said "ya I'm fine, I just dropped something and cannot figure out where it has gone!"
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ReplyDeleteMeghan, I really liked how you were making the setting interesting and having Ashley and her family starting a new day with happiness. You used some dialogue in the some. You might want to indent the first paragraph. And I can't wait to hear the rest of the story
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